Connected - Rough Cut 4

I have started to add music to this version of my short film but I still believe that more music will have to be put into the final version. I have also included titles and credits.

Improvements

-The music needs to start as soon as the titles start.
-The music should stop when the protagonists go out the door and go jogging. This is to ensure that the audience can get a clear comparison of the two from the diegetic sound.
-I need to add more music throughout and vary the music to ensure that the audience is kept interested. Such as romantic music when the happy person is having a meal with Rachel.
-I also need to ensure that I add a phone noise when the phone goes off.
-I need to add 'Editor' to my titles.